Girl so sweet, only seventeen
A prettier sight you'd never seen
Long raven hair, soft pale skin
A heart every man wanted to win
Clear blue eyes, deep as the sea
As gentle a soul as there could ever be
Then one quiet winter's day
She ventured to where she used to play
A forest so thick, not bothered by light
But not too far in she was given a fright
For before her stood a man so strong
His piercing eyes watched her far too long
She turned, a sparrow in flight, too late
He held her fast, told her to wait
He meant no harm, he looked so sweet
And so they agreed from then on they'd meet
Every day they were together in secret
She felt happy to bursting every time they met
A few weeks later, he loved her he said
So with this, alas, they agreed to wed
She wore her mother's antique wedding dress
They were to meet late at night, under moonlight's caress
Poor thing, she waited what seemed like forever
But her love would soon complete his wicked endeavour
She sees only a shadow before it all goes black
Her innocence is stolen in this violent attack
She awoke a spirit, viewing this scene from above
Blood stains the man she used to love
As she watches he smirks, stands then saunters away
The corpse bride lies where she used to play
omw wow thats amazing !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
i wanted to comment on this again YOU ARE THE BEST POET EVERRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!! it made me cry it was just that amazing I also read it again because I love it so much
That's so very sweet of you! I'm really glad you enjoyed it, my main goal with my writing is to invoke emotion in people, which I'm glad I did
So sad but u did a spectacular job of recreating the story, tho u left out how the parents did not allow the marriage
this is amazing! great job!….and so sad! *starts crying uncontrollably*
Aw thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it, I'm glad it evoked emotion
I love it I especially love the old timey words great job
Aw thanks so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it
This is so beautifully haunting. I love it. I simply love it.
This is brilliant. So touching and beautiful. Very good structure of the poem too.
This is amazing.
Eeeeeeuuuuueeeeuuee. It gives me chills. Love that.
I could really see Emily and the man that killed her, whose name now escapes me. Wonderful job
Wow. This is incredible. I liked the imagery, I could really picture it in my head
This is so beautiful! Just from that poem, I can clearly imagine it in my head, like the movie.
Wow this is amazing. Your a really good writer if your able to hit me. :3 Congrats Man slash Lady
I love the Corpse Bride! This was very well written and went right along with the story, as iwrof the character from the story wrote it herself. Great job and wonderful use of description
This is one of the best pieces I've read in a while, I love your choice in words! <3