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Girl so sweet, only seventeen
A prettier sight you'd never seen
Long raven hair, soft pale skin
A heart every man wanted to win
Clear blue eyes, deep as the sea
As gentle a soul as there could ever be
Then one quiet winter's day
She ventured to where she used to play
A forest so thick, not bothered by light
But not too far in she was given a fright
For before her stood a man so strong
His piercing eyes watched her far too long
She turned, a sparrow in flight, too late
He held her fast, told her to wait
He meant no harm, he looked so sweet
And so they agreed from then on they'd meet
Every day they were together in secret
She felt happy to bursting every time they met
A few weeks later, he loved her he said
So with this, alas, they agreed to wed
She wore her mother's antique wedding dress
They were to meet late at night, under moonlight's caress
Poor thing, she waited what seemed like forever
But her love would soon complete his wicked endeavour
She sees only a shadow before it all goes black
Her innocence is stolen in this violent attack
She awoke a spirit, viewing this scene from above
Blood stains the man she used to love
As she watches he smirks, stands then saunters away
The corpse bride lies where she used to play
Wrote this one for halloween, based on the story in Corpse Bride :P

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rollingpinkstone Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2015
Great job~~
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psycoblackwidow Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
omw wow thats amazing !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm so very glad you think so! :aww:
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linebeck14 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
i wanted to comment on this again YOU ARE THE BEST POET EVERRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!! :D it made me cry it was just that amazing I also read it again because I love it so much :D :D
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That's so very sweet of you! I'm really glad you enjoyed it, my main goal with my writing is to invoke emotion in people, which I'm glad I did :aww:
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linebeck14 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
:D you are amazing
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw I really appreciate that :blush: if you liked this poem, you may like some of my other poems as well :aww:
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DazedDaisiesO-o Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
So sad but u did a spectacular job of recreating the story, tho u left out how the parents did not allow the marriage
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! Aha you're right
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DazedDaisiesO-o Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ur welcome :)
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4everinked Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
this is amazing! great job!….and so sad! *starts crying uncontrollably*
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it, I'm glad it evoked emotion :aww:
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4everinked Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
lol! ur welcome!
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linebeck14 Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I love it I especially love the old timey words great job
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw thanks so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it :aww:
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linebeck14 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
you are so very welcome im gonna add it to my fave's if I didn't already
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PoppycockFanatic13 Featured By Owner May 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so beautifully haunting. I love it. I simply love it. :heart:
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner May 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it :heart:
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Lost-InMyWonderland Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is brilliant. So touching and beautiful. Very good structure of the poem too.:aww:
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm glad you think so! Thank you :aww:
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Lost-InMyWonderland Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem :D
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awesomelycute669 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2012  Student
awesome
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks!
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hetaliallover101 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Great poem
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks!
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hetaliallover101 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Welcome
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Poison-Root Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2012
This is amazing.
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank youu!
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Poison-Root Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2012
You're welcome!
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Sam-luvs-you Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011
Eeeeeeuuuuueeeeuuee. It gives me chills. Love that.
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Ahaa have you seen the movie though?
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Sam-luvs-you Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2011
Not in YEARS.
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Well watch it! It's sooo good :D
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Bloodlilly333 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I could really see Emily and the man that killed her, whose name now escapes me. Wonderful job
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm glad you like it, but I believe his name was Lord Barkis :P
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Bloodlilly333 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
That sounds right, yeah
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randomise42 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. This is incredible. I liked the imagery, I could really picture it in my head :heart:
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for reading and commenting, your opinion means a lot :heart:
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chocolatelovekitten Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:wow: This is so beautiful! Just from that poem, I can clearly imagine it in my head, like the movie.
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment, I really appreciate it :aww:
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chocolatelovekitten Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:iconwelcomeplz:
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AlwaysDramatic Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Wow this is amazing. Your a really good writer if your able to hit me. :3 Congrats Man slash Lady :)
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks so much! I'm glad you like it, and it's lady aha :)
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AlwaysDramatic Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
urwelcome haha me 2 :D
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IAmRainstormTheGinge Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2011
Wonderful. :meow:
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks :aww:
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heartlessxpoet Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2011
I love the Corpse Bride! This was very well written and went right along with the story, as iwrof the character from the story wrote it herself. Great job and wonderful use of description :clap:
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you a lot, your opinion means a lot :aww:
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heartlessxpoet Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011
you are very welcome :heart:
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Avril22583 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This is one of the best pieces I've read in a while, I love your choice in words! <3
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