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Girl so sweet, only seventeen
A prettier sight you'd never seen
Long raven hair, soft pale skin
A heart every man wanted to win
Clear blue eyes, deep as the sea
As gentle a soul as there could ever be
Then one quiet winter's day
She ventured to where she used to play
A forest so thick, not bothered by light
But not too far in she was given a fright
For before her stood a man so strong
His piercing eyes watched her far too long
She turned, a sparrow in flight, too late
He held her fast, told her to wait
He meant no harm, he looked so sweet
And so they agreed from then on they'd meet
Every day they were together in secret
She felt happy to bursting every time they met
A few weeks later, he loved her he said
So with this, alas, they agreed to wed
She wore her mother's antique wedding dress
They were to meet late at night, under moonlight's caress
Poor thing, she waited what seemed like forever
But her love would soon complete his wicked endeavour
She sees only a shadow before it all goes black
Her innocence is stolen in this violent attack
She awoke a spirit, viewing this scene from above
Blood stains the man she used to love
As she watches he smirks, stands then saunters away
The corpse bride lies where she used to play
Wrote this one for halloween, based on the story in Corpse Bride :P

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linebeck14 Aug 7, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
i wanted to comment on this again YOU ARE THE BEST POET EVERRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!! :D it made me cry it was just that amazing I also read it again because I love it so much :D :D
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That's so very sweet of you! I'm really glad you enjoyed it, my main goal with my writing is to invoke emotion in people, which I'm glad I did :aww:
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linebeck14 Aug 8, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
:D you are amazing
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw I really appreciate that :blush: if you liked this poem, you may like some of my other poems as well :aww:
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DazedDaisiesO-o Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
So sad but u did a spectacular job of recreating the story, tho u left out how the parents did not allow the marriage
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! Aha you're right
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DazedDaisiesO-o Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ur welcome :)
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4everinked Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
this is amazing! great job!….and so sad! *starts crying uncontrollably*
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it, I'm glad it evoked emotion :aww:
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4everinked Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
lol! ur welcome!
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