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The fire so radiant, it crackles and hisses
As the old lady tells of a time that she misses
"Listen, my dears," she says in a hush
"I'll tell you of when there was never a rush
For there once was a time when kings ruled the land
When the minstrels played songs in their small merry bands
When dragons and knights battled for love of the princess
Singing sweet songs in her pink frilly dress
By night the stars shone so bright in the sky
No electric lights to help you get by
As soon as the sun sank under the ground
The very earth itself dare not make a sound
'Twas the time when stories of elders were told
Legends and tales of the heroes of old
Afterward there would be players so fair
Fire dancers throwing flames high in the air
The children, they watch all of this in awe
Trying to remember all that they saw
Their parents looked on without any fear
For everyone was always in good cheer
But good things, they don't tend to last
They burn out and become a thing of the past
From a small disagreement there started a war
That's when people discovered they wanted more
So began an era of struggle and conflict
A world so corrupt that no one could stop it
To this very day there's violence and crime
Liars and thieves who are still in their prime
How I wish for the days when no tears were shed
When children could still sleep soundly in bed
Maybe some day things will change once again
Until then I suppose we must live with the pain"
I've noticed that there is never any good news anymore, and it made me think that there is no possible way humans started out with evil thoughts. My first time trying a rhyming poem, so it's not very good, but please tell me what you think!

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lilnutta10 Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderfully written as always
Such power and emotion behind your words
Im so glad to know such as fantastic deviant with brilliant writing skills and a wonderful deviant friend:heart:
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Awwwwww I feel so loved XD I'm very happy to know a deviant as kind and as talented as you :D
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lilnutta10 Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you kindly:heart:
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BrokenTrinket Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2010   Photographer
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the more I read this the more it really unfolded. I love the idea of peaceful days then turned into days of war. You brought a real reality to your subject. I love the flow.
From the gentle feeling
then into the sadness of war.The sentence that really impacted me was "When children could still sleep soundly in bed"
How true that the young children really suffer more of the impact. The is very lovely and written to the straight to the point. Very well done.
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much, I really appreciate your opinion XD
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Baffled-Jailbird Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2010
I love the imagery in this. Its short, sweet and precise. I really like the message. Perhaps, if you are a reader yourself, you might enjoy "The Telling" by Ursula K. Le Guin

This is a great piece!
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks, I love reading, I will definately check out the book XD
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upstairs25 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2010
wow this is really good!!!
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks XD
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KaiyaHaato Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
It's a beautiful poem. I love it. And what you said is totally true - there really doesn't seem to be any ? I'm glad you wrote somt like this though. It's hopeful.
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