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One day, Truth and Falsehood met at an inn, both weary from their travels. "My old friend!" cried Truth, "Come, allow me to buy you a drink." So they drank and exchanged stories of their travels. As they talked, Envy walked into the inn. Upon seeing Truth and Falsehood, Envy grew jealous of their friendship. Envy decided to find a way to make them hate each other. Now, it so happened that Greed was staying at the same inn. Envy met with Greed to form a plan. "Look at those two," Envy hissed. "They can't be friends, they never agree on anything!" Greed was only half listening. Envy knew this, but was ready for it. "Of course," Envy said softly, "we need to stop it. It is unnatural, like a bird with no flight, or a fish that can't swim." At this, Envy pulled out a bag of gold coins. Greed's heart began to race, fingers itching to just grab the bag, to caress the gold with loving fingertips. Envy smirked triumphantly, the plan was working perfectly. "Now, this is what's going to happen," Envy explained. "You are going to start spreading rumours about Truth and Falsehood, make up anything, so long as you turn them against each other. In exchange, I will give you this bag of gold.", shaking the bag, causing the coins to jingle invitingly, as clear as the loveliest music. Greed, of course, immediately agreed. However, Loyalty overheard the conversation, and told Truth and Falsehood. Wisdom, the owner of the inn, decided the best thing was to make Envy and Greed leave the inn, and to never come back. Envy, fuming, and Greed, ashamed, left the inn. The other innkeepers heard what had happened, and wouldn't allow them into their inns. They could only wander, forced to remember what they had done with every closed door they faced.

Never spread rumours and don't let greed cloud your judgement.
An entry for the Fable Me This contest. It was sooo hard not writing anything gender specific (his, her, etc.)!!! All comments and critique are welcome xD

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Fixed a sentence that didn't sound quite right and a few grammatical errors :aww:
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Beautiful! Beautiful! You are truly a great writer, like me. Not only did you write a great story, you also mixed in a moral and a life lesson as well. However, you need to work on your transitions a bit, because it you kind of jumped from one part to the next. For example, when Envy and Greed were leaving the inn, your transition there was kind of messy. But that's the only thing I can find wrong with it. I'm impressed that you wrote such a wonderful story that has a good lesson in it. Kudos to you, my friend.
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A lovely piece of writing! You did a very good job of distributing a very important message and making it seem as though Truth, falsehood, greed, and envy, are entities or an essence of some sort by not having gender claims. (him, her)

I really like how you told this story. You made it very simple and too the point.The idea and message of this story,along with the intent, were very well written and made the story flow easily and kept the reading interested! (it sure kept me reading!)

Very well done! You did avery great job writing this! This was very original and the plot was very enjoyable. The outcome to what Greed and Envy did was a very important life lesson that everyone should take a note of.
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RockstarVanity Jun 27, 2012  Professional Photographer
This awesome piece of art has been featured in More to Discover in Ontario, an exhibition at #fella curated by =PixlPhantasy :aww:
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Jun 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so very much! Very kind :aww:
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squimberrycupcake Mar 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's very interesting! :D I enjoyed readint it :)

as clear as the lovliest music

*loveliest
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Mar 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm glad you enjoyed it! :D

But thank you, I have fixed the mistake!
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squimberrycupcake Mar 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! :)
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Dec 11, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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Excellent!! I like it very much!! :aww: :clap: :clap: clap:
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Jun 15, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much xD
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