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The meadow whispers a hushed sigh
Caressed by a gentle breeze dancing by
Blades of grass shiver then rest
Rise and fall like a dreamer's chest
The hum of crickets singing their song
A night of peace that won't last long
There we lay, alone with our love
Stars from heaven hang just above
Your lips so soft, brushing my skin
Its feathery touch makes my head spin
I look into your eyes, deep as the sea
You hold my gaze as you smile at me
The beauty of our love made us appear to shine
We'll always have each other, your hand in mine
This seems unfinished to me for some reason, but I'll submit it anyway :bump:

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Melanie-J-Howle Featured By Owner May 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
We would love you to join us at :iconbeauty-devine: :heart:
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner May 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
For sure! :aww:
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Melanie-J-Howle Featured By Owner May 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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wildwaters Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
I think it is lovely! not unfinished! My favorite is the rise and fall of a dreamer's chest, ahh, so true!
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment, I really appreciate it!
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belfasterd Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2011
This is so touching!!! It seems finished to me :)
Really beautiful poem!!!!! <3
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks so much! I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment <3
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belfasterd Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2011
No problem, it is a great poem :)
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2011
Your fantastic work has been featured in Friday Night Features
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks so much! :hug:
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MiikaC Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2011   Writer
Beautiful : ) It really put a smile on my face.
I especially love
"Blades of grass shiver then rest
Rise and fall like a dreamer's chest"

Wonderful
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww I'm glad it did, thank you so much :aww:
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shujou-mitsukai Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2011
It doesn't feel and read like its unfinished or missing something... great job
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for reading and commenting :)
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KlaxonLithology Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Not bad for a love poem (I tend to grow tired of seeing these), though the flow in a few of the lines seems kind of lacking.
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks, I know love poems are very overdone but I couldn't help it :3 I appreciate your opinion, I'll work on that :P
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UCPoika Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2011
Very good. I think it is finished. The rest of it is meant to be lived. Quite the sonnet!
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks so much, I appreciate your opinion :aww:
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InTheStarryNightSky Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2011
A very sweet piece. Beautiful imagery. It seems finished to me, but then again that's just my opinion. Great job.
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks a lot, I really appreciate your opinion :aww:
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InTheStarryNightSky Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2011
You're welcome. :D
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elgonzoonyx Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2011
I like it. The flow of the rhymes works nicely. Also, even though it's an upbeat love poem, it doesn't feel cliche. This reads as a fresh love poem which is actually kinda hard to do these days. Good job.
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks so much, I really appreciate your opinion :D
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elgonzoonyx Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2011
You're welcome.
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MonsterSalsa Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2011   Photographer
I love it! The flow is wonderful and I also love your avatar XD It's bomb :D
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks so much! and omg thanks for noticing my avatar :D
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MonsterSalsa Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2011   Photographer
yeah! ITS BEAUTIFUL! XD
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TheDwarfInator Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing XD I miss having that feeling :( And again, awesome poem :D
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks :D You never know, I bet you'll feel it again some day :)
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TheDwarfInator Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I hope so lol. And your welcome :)
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Madoriko-Rose Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
This is beautiful! I love everything about it!! just perfectly written. Wonderful job :heart:
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RaindropsOnRoses21 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! I really appreciate your opinion :heart:
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Madoriko-Rose Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Anytime 8DD
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